Friday 28 October 2011

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - 28 Oct - OLD DYNAMITE - My 100 Words

Old Dynamite

He was a real piece of work. Even though his little boy was terrified of horses, he insisted on taking him out on the trail.
  So, I saddled Princess, my gentle Welsh pony, for the boy and let them get acquainted while I saddled his father’s horse.
While I led the boy around the ring, his father spat encouragement, “Are you going to spend all day walking around in circles?”
Then I tied Princess securely and brought out Old Dynamite, holding the harness while his father mounted.  Then I whisked the boy behind the fence.
Good Old Dynamite!

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9 comments:

  1. jshill28 October 2011 at 14:56

    Different direction, and serves them right, hehe.

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  2. Anonymous28 October 2011 at 15:21

    Sweet revenge! I love it!

    http://wp.me/p1MNJe-9V

    Have an awesome weekend!

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  3. Anonymous28 October 2011 at 16:31

    Hope Old Dynamite gives him a ride for his money, LOL.

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  4. Anonymous28 October 2011 at 19:34

    Dear Linda,

    This was a good example of a writer off to the races with a good story from a great photo prompt. Just the name 'Old Dynamite' had me nervous throughout. Feared for the son, too. Very nice, it turned out, and very nice.

    (And for some reason I'm being told my url is illegal and it won't let me post this response so I'm trying the old 'Anonymous' route.)

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  5. Linda Palund28 October 2011 at 20:05

    Thanks, Doug, Somehow, I like Anonymous said, but I like your comments. I am not like my story now - it came too easy, because the name Old Dynamite, or just Dynamite is an old "Western Joke".
    But thanks for being nice.

    Linda, Laura Lindaura

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  6. Anonymous28 October 2011 at 21:11

    "spat encouragement" --nailed his voice,

    Robin

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  7. Linda Palund29 October 2011 at 13:07

    Thanks Robin, I added that later. I hate my story and I obviously was too hasty, but all I did was sneak in and change shouted to spat. There's lots I want to change now. Next week I am going to be more careful and more writerly.
    Laura

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  8. Anonymous29 October 2011 at 16:08

    Oh maan. I like that direction. Also, I appreciate seeing some "justice" served.

    Here's mine (I added late!): http://thecolorlime.wordpress.com/2011/10/29/flash-fiction-discovered-99-words/

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  9. Anonymous29 October 2011 at 17:52

    Good old dynamite. A man's ultimate revenge!!
    Great use of the prompt. I got the sarcasm, but the ending "blew me away."

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