Thursday 31 October 2013

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - THE LILY POND - MY 100 WORDS BY LINDA PALUND



The Lily Pond
            We bought the house of our dreams.  We loved its peaceful garden with its lily pond and little stone bridge. 
            “It’s so beautiful.  Imagine leaving this to move back to the city.” I remarked to Janet at our housewarming party. 
            “Hmmm,” she replied, turning away and leading me back inside.
            They were arguing in the kitchen. “ An ‘Attractive Nuisance’!  Fill it in and feed the fish to the cats,” Janet’s husband was saying.
            “What was that all about?” I asked Tom later.
            “Turns out a neighbour’s kid drowned in that pond.  Probably why we got the house so cheap.”
           
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20 comments:

  1. Grisly, but just right for Halloween! A good deal is a good deal, however. Trick or Treat!

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    1. Jeez, Perry, what are you doing up so early?????

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    2. Wait a minute, or up so late????

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  2. Dear Lindaura,

    I think this may be one your best. Quite a twist at the end. Well done.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks, Rochelle. I have been trying to figure out what you are all doing up so early, but I realise that our time changed - Fell Back and possibly yours did not, so we are closer in time - but I am in Athens! Eek!

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  3. Dear Lindaura,

    This was an interesting turn of a story. You took it in a direction I think no one will guess. Very effective and strangely appropriate.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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    1. Now why is this strangely appropriate? At any rate, I have to say that your photo is gorgeous. I wanted to write a pretty story like Rochelle's, for Japanese gardens immediately sprang to my mind, but I had to go for something different. Are you up late or are you up early? You must be at least 12 hours away from me...

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  4. I loved the way the story turned; nicely paced Linda.

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  5. Hi Linda,
    Fish gotta swim, birds gotta fly and sometimes trespassing kids gotta die. The neighbors (American spelling) can always replace the boy. You know, the same way you replace a dead goldfish. But they shouldn't give up the dream house. Just the perfect diabolical ending for this spooky holiday. Wishing you more treats than tricks! Ron

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    1. Yep, poor trespassing kids. Sadly, the courts disagree - and socked the poor past owners with a huge cash outlay in civil court. No matter how high your fence, your attractive nuisance is at fault. Good plot for a serial killer though...

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  6. i agree with rochelle, one of your best. well done. :)

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  7. Extremely well written piece, Linda. I felt I was right there in the room when Tom relayed the bad news about the neighbors kid.

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  8. Oooo...that was like a punch in the gut.

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  9. Every attractive fence needs a six-foot fence around it to spoil enjoyment and view. *poo* I say. Keep the pond. Find a new neighbor child. Nice, grim story.

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  10. *sigh* I meant "Every attractive nuisance..." (silly fingers and mind have gotten old)

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  11. And I was thinking you meant the fence itself - because for some folks, that would be an attraction (What's behind that fence? I don't know, Ted, let's climb over and see!) So you are probably right on both counts, but you still made me chuckle.
    thanks
    Lindaura

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