tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post9178780866016709070..comments2023-03-25T11:44:23.411+00:00Comments on FICTION VICTIM, TOO: FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - 6 of Jan 2012 - THE PROMISE - My 100 words - from Linda Palund Linda Palundhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-73168904831665512012012-01-09T12:56:13.717+00:002012-01-09T12:56:13.717+00:00Ooooh...I really LOVE this one. There is urgency, ...Ooooh...I really LOVE this one. There is urgency, mystery, and drama. Plus it left me wanting to know more about what is going on. This could easily be a piece of something much larger. Well done!<br /><br />My drabble can be found here: http://quillshiv.wordpress.com/2012/01/06/drifting/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-57550902395790639272012-01-06T18:34:22.148+00:002012-01-06T18:34:22.148+00:00Loved the contrast between the dog floating above ...Loved the contrast between the dog floating above the snow and the mc sinking deep. Great story with a lot of tension. This strikes me as one that could be further developed, too. I'm thinking of doing that with mine from today eventually.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-77473078095828588912012-01-06T18:33:28.428+00:002012-01-06T18:33:28.428+00:00Ahh...Took me a second to remember "The Sound...Ahh...Took me a second to remember "The Sounds of Silence".<br />Thanks for the comments!Linda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-80762923696359675962012-01-06T18:11:03.917+00:002012-01-06T18:11:03.917+00:00Agreed: the non-specific threat is more compelling...Agreed: the non-specific threat is more compelling. Enjoyed the story.<br /><br />Simon and Garfunkel fan, are you?<br /><br />---<br />Here's my entry for this week: http://wp.me/p24aJS-YLupusAnthroposhttp://fulmoj.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-30015694557323466092012-01-06T17:55:36.646+00:002012-01-06T17:55:36.646+00:00Very interesting take.
Took me to a classic novel...Very interesting take. <br />Took me to a classic novel like set up for some reason. A Lady daring the unknown to help her ailing sister? sister-in-law? Mother? Clearly against her grain.<br />A faithful dog for company and her adversaries following her trail.<br />I like it!Parulhttp://faitaccompli.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-88122787132000655712012-01-06T17:29:53.909+00:002012-01-06T17:29:53.909+00:00I enjoyed your writing today. Isn't it intere...I enjoyed your writing today. Isn't it interesting how dogs and children seen to float above the snow (as in your words) and other things adults get mired in.Susan Wenzelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05441251619321494571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-50299144245435183832012-01-06T16:52:35.079+00:002012-01-06T16:52:35.079+00:00A great story.
I loved the mystery and tension evo...A great story.<br />I loved the mystery and tension evoked in the last two lines. It left me wondering just who 'they' might be.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-13244863473542290752012-01-06T16:32:28.780+00:002012-01-06T16:32:28.780+00:00I love a thriller!I love a thriller!Caroline Gerardohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12376556246231855571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-11977563583391864182012-01-06T15:22:25.388+00:002012-01-06T15:22:25.388+00:00There is plenty of tension in this short bit. Your...There is plenty of tension in this short bit. Your reader wonders who "they" are, and realizing your characters are on a mission of mercy, roots for their safety and success. Great job.<br /><br />Mine: http://sweettea.kdmccrite.com/flash-fiction-3/the-dog-in-the-snow-flash-fiction-1612/K.D. McCritehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01292089387063623318noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-24234989124661015922012-01-06T15:10:01.112+00:002012-01-06T15:10:01.112+00:00Maybe it's just me today, but I loved your las...Maybe it's just me today, but I loved your last sentence, too. For whatever reason, I think it does a lot of work in a tiny amount of words. Beautiful job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-36471628299906446532012-01-06T14:30:39.459+00:002012-01-06T14:30:39.459+00:00Loved the subtle threat of menace in this piece, a...Loved the subtle threat of menace in this piece, and the brief alliterations, but got hung up on the "please..., pleaded," part. Seems like a small repetition.<br /><br />happy new year!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-57334096219301511512012-01-06T14:01:21.218+00:002012-01-06T14:01:21.218+00:00It started out like a little jaunt in the snow, bu...It started out like a little jaunt in the snow, but ended with so much anxiety! Nicely done~!Susie Lindauhttp://susielindau.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-13013916728034178782012-01-06T12:16:49.955+00:002012-01-06T12:16:49.955+00:00Thanks, Carlos. I woke up with the different take ...Thanks, Carlos. I woke up with the different take on it. Lots of my stuff has to be edited after a night's sleep.<br />My life needs to be edited after a night's sleep...<br />XLinda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-86075956436856946202012-01-06T12:13:12.473+00:002012-01-06T12:13:12.473+00:00Yes, better! For the added tension and mystery, a...Yes, better! For the added tension and mystery, as Jan pointed out. Your description of the lightness of the dog on the snow was really nice.Carloshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08505246504063711095noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-80554007308617498332012-01-06T11:59:55.260+00:002012-01-06T11:59:55.260+00:00Tension, mystery, hope. You captured it all in so ...Tension, mystery, hope. You captured it all in so few words. Excellent, Linda! Happy New Year!Jan Morrillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15600019541133998696noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-85058836321315077422012-01-06T11:42:41.167+00:002012-01-06T11:42:41.167+00:00Yes, you got it! I had a mountain lion in the firs...Yes, you got it! I had a mountain lion in the first version!<br />Thanks, Doug, see you next week<br />and Happy New Year!Linda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-8702876549182894032012-01-06T11:31:28.567+00:002012-01-06T11:31:28.567+00:00Dear Lindaura,
Loved your story, especially the m...Dear Lindaura,<br /><br />Loved your story, especially the mystery that the un-named enemy and un-specified illness evokes. <br /><br />Did I get the rewritten version you mentioned to Carlos, I wonder? <br /><br />Aloha,<br /><br />DougDouglas MacIlroyhttp://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-7846689935487145072012-01-06T10:07:21.148+00:002012-01-06T10:07:21.148+00:00Dear Carlos,
I had to rewrite this in the morning....Dear Carlos,<br />I had to rewrite this in the morning. Please take another look.<br />XLinda Palundhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10306701232418627061noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3072297827426071248.post-34649887858877655012012-01-06T00:30:09.949+00:002012-01-06T00:30:09.949+00:00Funny how we respond similarly to the prompts. Th...Funny how we respond similarly to the prompts. This time though, I felt completely isolated from even the dog while you were connected to him. Uncharacteristic for me, probably a reflection of how I'm feeling right now.Carlos Repuesto De La Tablahttp://repuestodelatabla.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.com