Friday, 21 October 2011

FLASH FRIDAY - 21 of October - The Egg - by Linda Palund

The Egg - 100 words


          My oar sliced silently through the looking glass surface of the water as I rowed to the island.  I knew something was wrong.
         It shouldn't be this quiet.
         Where were the birds, whose eggs I had come to count?  They should be watching me from off shore or circling above my head
         I beached the dinghy and crept through the brush, careful not to disturb any nests. But there were no nests. There were no eggs.
          At last! One perfect nest. But inside, instead of a spotted egg, lay a hideous stone marble, exuding a poison that made me shudder.


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12 comments:

  1. jshill21 October 2011 at 16:03

    Sunny side up?

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  2. Linda Palund21 October 2011 at 16:40

    Ha!

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  3. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 16:53

    This is great! I love the description and the twist!!

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  4. Siobhan Muir21 October 2011 at 17:23

    Yipe! Run away! Scary and well written. Thanks for sharing and welcome. :)

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  5. Russell21 October 2011 at 17:32

    Wow, I'd love to hear the soundtrack. Spooky.
    Great job, Linda.

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  6. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 17:34

    I'm just wondering who would make a perfect nest for a stone -- might be someone I would want to meet! (or maybe not, if they got rid of all the birds, too).

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  7. Anonymous21 October 2011 at 18:43

    This was a unique way to use the prompt and I enjoyed it very much. I live seeing how everyone comes up with a different take!

    Madison

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  8. Tiyana Marie21 October 2011 at 19:34

    "Sunny side up?"

    Haha.

    Great story, Linda, and welcome to the club!

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  9. Mahjira21 October 2011 at 20:50

    I LOVE this line..."My oar sliced silently through the water's looking glass surface.."
    I love the description! As for the evil stone marble instead of an egg... ;) I wonder
    what laid it....

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  10. Douglas MacIlroy21 October 2011 at 22:29

    Hi,

    A very nice take on the prompt, which was tough this week. The world you crafted was quietly malevolent. Good job. Time to paddle the hell out of there.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  11. Linda Palund22 October 2011 at 10:56

    Oh Doug! thank you. You used the word malevolent and now I think I should have used malevolence instead of evil!
    This was fun and I thank you all.
    Linda

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  12. Anonymous22 October 2011 at 21:01

    Excellent...and the found nest was appropriately in a class of its own; you did that with one word, "perfect".
    Robin

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