Thursday 10 May 2012

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS - 10 May 2012 - LUNA - My 100 Words - Linda Palund

LUNA

         The clouds of smoke billowed up, obscuring the skies, until we no longer could tell day from night.  Cast in shadow, the relentless gloom finally coalesced into a monstrous thunderhead.  Then at last the rains came.
         As the ash fell back to earth, the rain finally ceased. The veil of cloud lifted, the dark skirts parted, and she revealed herself to us once more. Scintillating in her lustre, her luminous centre radiant and compelling.
         She calls to us in her effulgence, in her wantonness.  Her lust glorious, incandescent and dazzling. We will be fruitful again.  We will multiply.

33 comments:

  1. Wow – a monochrome Georgia O'Keefe in print! Sensuality plus, Ms Glamoura.

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  2. Thanks Carlos! That's great praise, coming from you.
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  3. Is this apocalyptic? Nice writing. Here's mine: www.rochelle-wisoff.blogspot.com

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    1. Yes, I tried to combine the end of things with the beginning of things and of course, a lot of sex!

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  4. Dear Linda,

    You join the ranks of those who have successfully channeled voices from the past (though I think perhaps that your story is more timeless than the rest of them). Very well done.

    Thanks for visiting my Last of the First and leaving a comment. The link I leave here is for your readers. Thanks, D. http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/last-of-the-first/

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    1. Thanks, Doug, this prompt, as I said, was way to evocative for me and I took it at face value in the end, although the werewolves were howling and the vampires were ravenous....

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  5. I love that you took a dystopian future and inserted hope. Your language is sensual and evocative. Very well done!

    Wakefield
    http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/05/the-good-old-days-friday-fictioneers.html

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  6. Beautifully descriptive, Lindaura! I love your word choice. One typo I noticed, I think. Should "lifed" be "lifted?" Otherwise, fantastic!

    --Jan
    http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/flashfriday-fictioneers-hes-watching/

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    1. Thanks, Jan. I had just gone in a few moments before to switch words around and managed to lose that T. So I have put it back in now! Thanks so much for letting me know. I always keep editing until I truly feel it is as good as it gets!
      Laura

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  7. I'm hoping this will let me comment. Ilthis piece was great. From dire to hopeful in a smooth way. The end made me thing of pagans doing a fertility celebration and enjoying one another's bodies to pay homage to the moon. Really nice.

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  8. So sensual, the imagery of rain as the male and earht as the female, in their natural passion and being fruitful, yielding so much in a timeless dance of ecstacy. Beautifully said. I love this so much. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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  9. What a wonderfully rich little story. The imagery is so vivid and palpable. I, too, got the feeling of a pagan ritual about it. It makes one feel as if they are there amidst it all. Bravo!

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  10. So this is what happens after the apocalypse. I never would have guessed. Nice story.

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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    1. Certainly the opposite of your story! A little wishful thinking on my part and Rorschach would have a field day with me!

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  11. Very nice description and some optimism after the end of the world.

    Thanks for the comment on mine.

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  12. The slight hint of eroticism (maybe?)in that second paragraph adds a another layer over the previous story. Excellent execution.

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    1. Gosh, I didn't realise this was you! So, clever owl, just a hist of eroticism? Am I losing my touch?
      Thanks though,
      Laura

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  13. the starting as well ending so creative its gives some creation realy

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  14. I love stories of hope. Without hope we have nothing.

    thanks for the nice comments on mine. You're right, it is a corny pun, but people are laughing around the world--and that make me smile :)

    here it is for others http://russellgayer.blogspot.com/

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  15. Well you excelled yourself today. As others have said, a very sensual piece. I had to look up 'effulgence' and was disappointed; it sounded ruder than that. ;) I'm not normally a lover of post-apocalyptic work, but this had such a natural ring of hope to it that you converted me. Just this once.

    You've been to mine but for others, it's at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/you-called-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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  16. I wrote you a long (ish) comment and it disappeared when I pressed 'publish'. Irritating. Anyway, the essence of it was that I don't normally like post apocalyptic stuff, but I made an exception in your case because you excelled yourself this week, blending a normally depressing scenario with a sense of hope. And of course sensuality. I had to look up the word 'effulgence' and was disappointed. It sounded ruder than that. This was a good one. Really good.

    Mine's at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/you-called-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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    1. Thank you for your extra remarks. Something seems to be wrong - and I somehow DID get both of your lovely comments. I am glad it worked. It just started out as my gut reaction to the photo, then I got a little carried away.

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    2. Something is definitely wrong here with my comments. I had to reload the page for them to work. Weird - but there they are!

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  17. I feel like Brandon Scott on this. Such a provocative set of words here. This is obviously set after a disaster, but in such a way that it is still eerily beautiful. I love this one. Here's mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/friday-flash-fiction-birthing.html

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    1. Thank you, Atiya, I like that you thought the words were provocative, because that was what I was looking for.
      Off to yours now,
      Lindaura

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  18. It feels like a firestorm! Words of power! http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/its-here-the-weekend-is-nigh-fridayfictioneers-on-buffalo-river/ will take you to mine

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  19. Thanks for improving my vocablulary. Had to pick up the dictionary on efflugent. Nice word. Overall, thought this was lyrical, poetic, beautiful. Thanks for the nice comment on my story. Having to post this as anonymous because of wanking blogspot. Ron

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  20. Ms Glamoura, this is my second comment. This piece is really one of your very best. I think it doesn't matter if it is read as post-apocalyptic or not, it is just a beautiful collection of words that evoke darkness, power and feminine sensuality in equal measure. As I said before, it is like a painting.

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    1. Thank you for this surprising praise. I was trying for this effect, but did not really think it was good enough and now I feel pretty good about it. So thank you very much.
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  21. There's a definite sense of energy and urgency building in this passage. Well constructed and beautifully written.
    Here's mine: http://wp.me/p1Tjpv-aJ

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  22. Now that's a sensual and fertile reawakening! I agree with Charley ... a painting. Mine is duller, but a change of pace (for me). Hope Carlos doesn't do a psychological analysis of it. Anyway ... http://scottcheck.blogspot.com/

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  23. I like how you went from despair to hope in just a few words. The only thing that didn't work for me was the word "will" at the end because it struck me as too overly optimistic and it made the ending too cut and dried. There's nothing wrong with that, it's just that I'm not a very optimistic person! :)

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  24. Hi Michael, I am late in replying to your comment, but I meant to - because you are right. That was a little too pat. My robot would have said "Perhaps we will multiply".
    I am all optimism this week...

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